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That is my diary,can you help me find some grammar mistake and delete some meaningless words?
Today, I have had a happy day, it’s because of table tennis. Firstly, table tennis is my favorite sport. However, I always didn’t have a chance to play this. About five years later, I finally had this chance.
When I was about eleven years old, I had started to touch this sport. Although I don’t be master now, when I was playing this with my classmate, I would felt very happy. In fact, I haven’t done exercise for a long time, so I ‘m looked like a fat boy. Recently, I hope to keep myself fit. However, I really don’t have some free time and a stability to reach this goal.
Besides, I really like eating so much. When I was a child, a balsam pear had been a food I dislike. However, it‘s my favorite now. So, if you ask me which food I dislike, I won’t be able to answer you. I must give up this bad habit, otherwise, I will be a fat boy forever.
second line last word… instead of this use ” It” .. you use the word this when you refer to something in your hands or by other words in the same sentence your using.
second paragraph first line… dont say I had started, say I started. no need for had and instead of touch say play.
second paragraph second line… dont say I don’t be master now.. say Although I’m not a master on it now, ….
second paragraph second line .. dont say when i was playing this. say when I used to play it. and dont say I would feel very happy
third line second paragraph, instead of saying I haven’t done excercise for a long time, say Because I haven’t practised it for a long time. and take the word in fact off
third line third paragraph, don’t say So I’m looked like a fat boy. say I look like a fat boy now.
third paragraph 4th line, don’t say i hope to keep myself fit. say recently, I wanted to keep myself in a good shape again. take the A off from stability because there is and before it.
say moreover instead of besides. say when I was a child, a blasam pear was a type of food that I disliked. However, its my favourite food now. So, if you ask me which food I dislike, I won’t be able to answer you. I must erase this bad habit out of my life or otherwise I will be a fat boy forever
Hint: don’t use a lot of commas(,) try to lessen ur sentences and watch ur grammer.
I hope that helped and if you have any question ask me
Dunlop Table Tennis Masters 2009